Winning Comment for Entry #1:
The poem is concise and I can picture this happening to souls who participate in such an olympic games in Heaven.
Heaven is our goal! Our life here is temporary! Although we do not know the hour or the day we must remain vigilant for God's return.
"Heaven's Olympics" brings this out clearly and also brings out the countless angels who are our friends. Our Guardian Angel would like nothing better than have us in the winner's circle by being on God's Team. That is what everybody should be aspiring to with the help of God.
Yes, God is the way and the light! This poem is full of picturesque words that makes one feel good after reading it! Louis Joseph Barbier Jr.
Two Winning Comments for Entry #2:
By God's grace, I am a Christian poet also and I reckon that the three
writers have done well, but here are my reasons for my decision on "One God."
1: The message was clear. Clarity for the reader in a poem is
important. When we write, we know what we want to say but we should give it to others to scrutinize and the message should come out without stressing the reader.
2: I love the choice of words the writer used—simple words attract more audience—and I enjoyed reading it; the punctuation and paragraphs all in the right places.
3: The poem was complete. One thing most poets miss is to finish the poem well, but this piece was complete.
4: Originality. It was obvious to me that the poet was inspired and had an original work born out of deep reflection.
5: The use of idiomatic expressions and rhythm even makes the poem friendly and readable
6: I liked the ideas and illustrations the poet used. Using words like
"bank and bars" shopping malls etc.
7: This leads me to the seventh point of imagination, the ideas create a lasting imagination in the reader's mind.
8. If you read this poem carefully, you will note that there is a lot of
information in the poem for someone who practices the Christian faith. It talks about the season of darkness, worldliness, deceit from the kingdom of darkness and then the crucifixion, resurrection of Jesus and his abundant grace. This is really good. Victoria Nwosu
I vote for "One God." Poetic tension is evident between stanzas 1–3 (life before faith) and 4–6 (life with faith). This gives balance and direction to the poem as well. The images are universally understood and invoke specific and lively senarios in the mind's eye (bars, banks, malls, tarot cards). The poet brings all of these under one concept as places where idolatry takes place. Who would have thought tarot cards and banks would have anything in common??
That is both the genius and theme—we commit idolatry even in morally acceptable places such as the mall. This challenges the readers to reflect on their own lives and habits. The poet implies that God is in a way a trickster just as her seducers have been—and a more masterful one at that. Yet, the Divine Trickster works light and life, sacrifice and mercy—demonstrating His unmatched omnipotence and love and grace toward humankind.
Unbelieving readers may find themselves in stanzas 1–3 and encounter the gospel and all the possibilities it has to offer them. In this way, the poem is a guiding light pointing them to life in Christ.
Readers who already believe find themselves somewhere in stanza 4–6. They all can claim the name "Lazarus" and re-experience all the joy and gratitude that that brings. In this way, the poem is devotional in its effect, leading the reader into a time of worship and gratitude.
This is truly a beautiful piece. Donna Wallace
Winning Comment for Entry #3:
"Holy Comforter" begins with its use of double entendre in its title, using the word “comforter” to bring to mind 1) a “quilt,” which wraps the body warmly for comfort; and 2) a person or thing that brings comfort, or soothes. This poem has a consistent mood throughout, using words such as “delicate” and “graced” to affirm the aforementioned quiet and careful moving of the spirit of God. The poem is smattered with bits of assonance (ie. You have moved into…) and alliteration (ie. …spooled across my thoughts with delicate maneuvers…), and synecdoche in line 5. Repetition is skillfully used in both the use of the phrases beginning “You have…” and in lines 2–3 and 15–16. Instead of saying God takes away the pain’s ashes, the author shows this through the imagery of the retreating winds getting hold of them. Ongoing imagery makes this poem a pleasure for the senses, particularly in lines 4–5, and especially in the amazing picture the last 5 lines paints. Carole Davis